1. Model: Twisting and punching and kicking, the two boys rolled across the floor.
--Lois Duncan, A Gift of Magic
-Laughing and yelling and celebrating, the winning team cavorted in the locker room.
-Cheering and hollering and rooting, the fans went crazy in the stadium.
2. Model: He fell back exhausted, his ankle pounding.
-Laughing and yelling and celebrating, the winning team cavorted in the locker room.
-Cheering and hollering and rooting, the fans went crazy in the stadium.
2. Model: He fell back exhausted, his ankle pounding.
--Raplh Ellison, "Flying Home"
-She raced fast determined, her lungs were burstin.
-She slumped wearily, her brain worn-out.
-She raced fast determined, her lungs were burstin.
-She slumped wearily, her brain worn-out.
3. Model: Alone, Tom looked around the room and knew that he was a stranger here.
--Hal Borland, When the Legends Die
-Afraid, Clark walked down the alley hoping he was alone.
-Happy, Bill came to work with a positive attitude.
-Afraid, Clark walked down the alley hoping he was alone.
-Happy, Bill came to work with a positive attitude.
4. Model: The room was empty , a silent world of sinks, drain boards, and lock cupboards.
--Frank Bonham, Chief
-The arena was full, a huge cavern filled with fans, bright lights, and exciting music.
-The room was full, a huge space filled with people, colorful painting, and classical music.
-The arena was full, a huge cavern filled with fans, bright lights, and exciting music.
-The room was full, a huge space filled with people, colorful painting, and classical music.
1 comment:
Excellent job modeling the sentences and combining sentences.
Grade: 10/10
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